My thoughts, putrid
birds flying onto my shoulder tops, would chirp their inner songs urging me to
fulfill the tiniest wants: get lost here, find this, try that, and go wherever.
From my previous essay “Nostalgic Irony”, I decided to expand
upon the moment that personified the idea of living ideas. My mind is a jungle,
the limbs of trees, thoughts, stretching far and wide, creating their own
canopy. It’s a bit of a struggle to narrow onto a specific tree, a certain
branch, a single leaf. This moment primarily focuses on wishes from said ideas
I have inside of myself.
In this second essay, I really want
to push the envelope. I have the capabilities to make an essay that is at least
mostly comprehensible and abstract to the point of wowing another, including
myself ironically, but I personally feel like I lack a certain form of
coherence that I see from other mentor texts seen throughout the course. I want
to elaborate on this moment so much so that I create something if not equal
then better than my first essay.
In my first essay I used the essays
Joyas Voladoras by Brian Doyle and Here is New York by E.B. White, and
while I’m not completely certain which essay I feel the most comfortable
incorporating over the other, Here is New
York was the center focus of my last essay, so I feel that I will be
steering away from any potential danger of not completing the point of the
second essay: find a new idea. Joyas
Voladoras then is a good fit, but in regards to the new essays we have available
to us, I will try to embed the essays The
Art of Failure by Malcolm Gladwell, because it paints a rather splendid
image of trial and error that I feel works with my moment, and Language Choice by Young-Jin Park,
because of its many personal testimonies. I also feel like I could try to
incorporate the film The Five
Obstructions because the method of recreation is another underlying theme
within this new essay (although it isn’t precisely the main focus).
Solid. I feel as though you have a mental balance as to where you want the direction of your essay to go. From the sound of it, all of your reference text(s)/movie(s) won't just coexist with the main idea of your essay, but instead enhance it, or, help flourish your essay if you rather. You seem very in touch with your inner being, with that being said, maybe you should try selling a form of self comfort for those who aren't in your writing.
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